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november
kissed me blue
and cold and bitter;

eyes that cradle
the sun without
opening, and hands

that have forgotten
the way to heaven.
Alternate Title: Never Better

Birthday to me, birthday to me, birthday, birthday, birthday to me.

I wasn't particularly happy when I wrote this a few days ago (as a result it's slightly off) but today was nice.

Tell me what you think?

No plagiarizing.


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theredstripe Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simple, yet very effective in my opinion. Very nice! :D
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flummo Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured here!
I'd really appreciate it if you could give some love to the other features and :+fav: the journal :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my goodness thanks so so much! :huggle:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the simplicity of this. there is just enough here.
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flummo Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you think so. :heart: Thank you for the :+fav: :)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
perfect opening lines
"november
kissed me blue
and cold and bitter"
<3
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flummo Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much. :heart: And for the :+fav: as well! :)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh, you're more than welcome! <3
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