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I want you to break
and never bend for me,

see my history
spiderweb your brilliance
till you belong to me
(and I, to you)
utterly and forever

and know
you cannot stop this.
”you are the never of my forever,
you are my love, my love, my love.”


The English’s translation of Carla Bruni’s song Le toi du moi is You Of Me.

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Critique [link] on ~IOwnSarcasm's piece, in the seams. Go check it out. ;)

I feel as if it’s a bit short. Might edit or add it to something bigger later on. What do you think of the length? What do you get from this? General comments please. :)

No plagiarizing.



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EDIT, November 25, '12: Oh my goodness, a DD, what the heck, this was so unexpected. :jawdrop: Thank you so so much!! :icondummylahugplz: :iconlawooplz: Especially to *Mrs-Freestar-Bul and `thorns!
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Given 2012-11-24
I Of You by *Flummoxative ( Suggested by Mrs-Freestar-Bul and Featured by thorns )
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice. Just change till to 'til (unless you're planting a garden lol)  
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*dies*

I understand 100% why this piece received a Daily Deviation (congratulations, by the way!), it is beautifully written. You have chosen such wonderful words and you have arranged them incredibly - you have created such powerful imagery, especially in the second stanza:

'see my history
spiderweb your brilliance
till you belong to me'


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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you Madeline. :hug:
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
ive borrowed your title for a found title poem: [link]

;) :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Student Writer
:la:
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emo-art Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"you are the never of my forever"...I love that line ^_^
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flummo Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
:nod: Carla Bruni is awesome.
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emo-art Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
damn right! ;o
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Writer
Shivered when I read this. Well done.
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flummo Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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